Can I get critique on a picture please?

[ayaandjudah]

I've been processing my photos after shooting in the RAW for about three weeks now. And my husband and my mother tell me that I'm making my kids too pale and that I should leave them straight out of the camera.

What am I doing wrong?????

Here is an example: SOOC



And here is what I did:


Am I just missing the eye for what a photo should look like?

Why oh why do I suck at this???